Globalization,
leading international trade, is a double edged sword. It is the main
contributor to global environmental problems . The situations are worse
in those countries which do not have proper environmental laws. Due to
globalization, the increase of people 's demands, countries'
exports, and thus global trading cause increase in pollution. In this
way, word trade acts as channel for global problems. Technologies are
there to help. Unfortunately, they are not made use of. Governments fail to control the level of polluting activities, although they play an important role. Many just make superficial efforts and are ineffective.
On the other hand, globalization brings the world together by sharing the worldwide information, bringing about global awareness. As
a result, the global issues are watched and concerned by everyone. In
addition, studies show local industries pollute more than foreign
investments. Authorities have to do something to tackle the problems
caused by globalization.
Globalization, leading international trade, is a double edged sword. (Rephrase)
ReplyDeleteDue to globalization, the increase of people 's demands, countries' exports, and thus global trading cause(Tense)(^)increase in pollution. THE REMAINDER OF THE PARAGRAPH There are numerous short unlinked sentences here. Can you combine some of the and use linking words.
In this way, word trade acts as channel for global problems. Technologies are there to help. Unfortunately, they are not made use of. Governments fail to control the level of polluting activities, although they play an important role. Many just make superficial efforts and are ineffective.
On the other hand, globalization brings the world together by//sharing the worldwide information, bringing about global awareness.WORD ORDER\\
As a result, the global issues are watched(Wrong word) and //concerned(REPHRASE\\) by everyone(REally! Everyone!). In addition, studies show local industries pollute more than foreign investments. (LINK)Authorities have to do something to tackle the problems caused by globalization.